Thus, my task has been to make those problems and Areia believable, make the magic rules completely soundproof, build up character relationships better, and all the while not bore the reader with too much extraneous information. Which means I've been hunting and pecking through 300 pages (well, 200, since pages 1-100 were already sorted through for chapters 1-5) for the juicy bits and adding in filler as needed. I did my first run through for this chapter by hand, editing the printed pages and writing the new scenes in a notebook. Now I'm typing it all up and I find myself thinking back to the Choose Your Own Adventure novels that I used to read when I was in the sixth grade. You know the ones where there would be a page of a scene, and at the bottom it would say something like:
- To throw Bobby off a cliff, turn to page 44.
- To rescue Bobby with a giant hammock flown in by a helicopter, turn to page 92.
Only I can't remember now if it revealed what the next scene would be or if it was more mysterious:
- To have Bobby go down the left trail, turn to page 84.
- To have Bobby experience something he's never done before, turn to page 72.
(I'd definitely go to page 72 in this choice.)
So that's how my rewrites have been going: Skip from page 289 back to 144, add in the text marked "triangle with a circle plus an X through it*" in my handwritten notebook, then skip to page 201. (*I make myself reference notes on the printed pages that refer to my handwritten notebook by using hieroglyphic-type marks like the triangle with a circle plus an X through it. That way I don't get confused by numbered notations. Also, I get to doodle for a moment.)
But I'd forgotten another thing about the Choose Your Own Adventure novels: after the first two or three, they became boring. I always wanted more story. I hated that so many plot lines led back to the same ending. I wanted a longer book. I wanted more character development. Which is why I stopped reading those books. So, while patching together this chapter scene by non-linear scene has been interesting, I'm looking forward to the second round of edits where page 20 will be followed by page 21. And as far as wanting more, well, I've got another 1,000 pages to go.